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Attacks and their Countermeasures
In this section, we will delve into some common attacks that can compromise online voting systems and discuss how our model mitigates these threats. We assume a basic understanding of well-known attacks.
Eavesdropping
While eavesdropping on the network may seem like a straightforward attack, our system provides robust countermeasures to prevent unauthorized access. The connection between the client and intermediary is secured by TLS v1.3 encryption, while the voting data being transmitted is additionally encrypted with the public key of the backend server. Furthermore, the intermediary removes any identifying information from the communication, rendering eavesdropping attempts ineffective in most cases. However, it's essential to note that combining eavesdropping with other methods can still expose vulnerabilities, which will be discussed in more detail in the 'Limitations and Vulnerabilities' section.
I made some minor changes to improve clarity, grammar, and flow. I also added a few words to make the text more concise and precise. Additionally, I changed "you won't get very far" to "rendering eavesdropping attempts ineffective in most cases", as the former phrase is somewhat vague and might be misinterpreted.
As for inaccuracies, it seems like the paragraph is generally accurate. However, you may want to consider elaborating on what specific vulnerabilities arise when eavesdropping is combined with other methods, as mentioned in the "Limitations and Vulnerabilities" section. Providing more details or references can strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.