I am writing a scientific paper on information security during online voting. I will provide you with paragraphs of text. Your task is to improve the writing and point out any inaccuracies if applicable. The first section is about Requirements for fair elections. +### FIRST PARAGRAPH ### +% PARAGRAPH Requirements for fair physical voting and elections, how are they implemented? + +Before making the dive into web-based voting, let’s look at how elections work when they use physical ballots and what they require to be free and fair. We will consider these requirements as the base requirements for any voting system. + +First, citizens must be able to register to vote when they meet certain eligibility requirements and then cast their ballot without unnecessary burden or restrictions. Therefore, voters must have easy access to polling places and reasonable accommodations should be in place for citizens with disabilities or other health conditions. Additionally, elections must be conducted independently of government interference, counting votes should be reliably accurate and citizens should make informed choices through readily available, accurate and unbiased information.
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+FIRST PARAGRAPH
+The foundation for fair elections lies in understanding the requirements that govern traditional physical voting systems. As we explore the realm of web-based voting, it is essential to establish these baseline principles as the standard against which any electronic voting system must be measured.
+Before proceeding, let us consider the fundamental requirements necessary to ensure free and fair elections. These include: ensuring citizens have unhindered access to registration processes, casting their ballots without undue burden or restrictions, and having reasonable accommodations in place for individuals with disabilities or health conditions that may impact their ability to vote. Furthermore, it is crucial that elections are conducted independently of government interference, vote counting is accurate and reliable, and citizens have access to readily available, unbiased information to inform their decisions.
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- Changed "dive into web-based voting" to "explore the realm of web-based voting", which is more precise and formal. +
- Added transitional phrases ("As we explore", "Before proceeding") to connect the paragraph's ideas cohesively. +
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Regarding inaccuracies, I did not find any in this particular paragraph. However, please note that it is essential to verify the accuracy of your information throughout your paper, as even minor inaccuracies can compromise its credibility.
+The first part seems a bit archaic. Rewrite it to be formal but modern.
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+FIRST PARAGRAPH
+Elections require a foundation of fairness and transparency, which is built on established principles that govern traditional voting systems. As we examine the development of web-based voting, it's essential to establish these fundamental requirements as the benchmark for any electronic voting system.
+Before proceeding, let's consider the essential criteria necessary to ensure free and fair elections. These include: ensuring citizens have unrestricted access to voter registration processes, casting their ballots without undue burden or restrictions, and providing reasonable accommodations for individuals with disabilities or health conditions that may impact their ability to vote. Furthermore, it is crucial that elections are conducted independently of government interference, vote counting is accurate and reliable, and citizens have access to readily available, unbiased information to inform their decisions.
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- Changed "the foundation for fair elections lies" to "Elections require a foundation of fairness and transparency", which is more concise and formal. +
- Removed the phrase "As we explore the realm of web-based voting" and replaced it with "As we examine the development of web-based voting", which is more precise and modern. +
- Minor wording adjustments for clarity and precision. +
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+% PARAGRAPH Introduction of electronic voting (not web-based) + +For a while now, voters have not only been able to cast their vote using a paper ballot, but also using electronic voting systems. These systems are not without their flaws, as it has been shown that they lack verifiability properties. It is rather impossible to guarantee that the machines/systems have not been tampered with. (Veronique, Verifiability e-voting systems) + +% PARAGRAPH REVIEWING Translation into requirements for fair online voting + +Over the years, there has been an increasing interest in allowing the user to cast their vote remotely, using a web-based architecture that is safe to use (Estiona, Moscow, Democracy Live, iVote). This implies several extra requirements for voting. + +Generally speaking, there are five requirements for information security: data confidentiality, data integrity, availability, authenticity and auditability, the latter often called accountability or non-repudiation. Even though these requirements are used often and are well known in the data security community, it might be unclear how they should be interpreted in the context of online voting. We will discuss these special cases in a couple of paragraphs. (https://www.emerald.com/insight/content/doi/10.1108/09685220110366768/full/html)
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+SECOND PARAGRAPH Introduction to Electronic Voting
+Electronic voting systems have been introduced as an alternative to traditional paper ballots, allowing voters to cast their votes using machines or digital platforms. However, these systems have faced criticism for lacking verifiability properties, making it difficult to ensure that the voting process has not been tampered with (Veronique, Verifiability e-voting systems). The concerns surrounding the integrity of electronic voting systems underscore the need for robust security measures.
+THIRD PARAGRAPH Reviewing Requirements for Fair Online Voting
+The desire to enable remote voting using web-based architectures has led to increased interest in online voting systems that are secure and trustworthy (Estiona, Moscow, Democracy Live, iVote). This shift towards online voting introduces additional requirements for information security. In the data security community, five fundamental requirements are widely recognized: data confidentiality, data integrity, availability, authenticity, and auditability, also known as non-repudiation or accountability. While these requirements are well-established, their application in the context of online voting may require specialized interpretation. We will delve into these special cases in the following paragraphs (https://www.emerald.com/insight/content/doi/10.1108/09685220110366768/full/html).
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- Emphasized the importance of security measures in electronic voting systems. +
- Minor adjustments to formatting and punctuation. +
Please let me know if you'd like any further changes!
+Increase coherence between the first paragraph and the second.
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+SECOND PARAGRAPH Introduction to Electronic Voting
+Electronic voting systems have been introduced as an alternative to traditional paper ballots, aiming to improve the efficiency and accessibility of the voting process. However, these systems have faced criticism for lacking verifiability properties, making it difficult to ensure that the voting process has not been tampered with (Veronique, Verifiability e-voting systems). This lack of transparency raises concerns about the integrity of electronic voting systems, highlighting the need for robust security measures.
+THIRD PARAGRAPH Reviewing Requirements for Fair Online Voting
+As we consider the development of online voting systems, it is essential to build upon the foundation established by traditional voting systems. The desire to enable remote voting using web-architectures has led to increased interest in online voting systems that are secure and trustworthy (Estiona, Moscow, Democracy Live, iVote). This shift towards online voting introduces additional requirements for information security, which must be carefully considered to ensure the integrity of the voting process.
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+I now have this: +% PARAGRAPH Introduction of electronic voting (not web-based) + +Electronic voting systems have been introduced over the years as an alternative to traditional paper ballots, allowing voters to cast their votes using machines or digital platforms. These systems have faced criticism for lacking verifiability properties, making it difficult to ensure that the voting process has not been tampered with. The concerns surrounding the integrity of electronic voting systems underscore the need for robust security measures. + +% PARAGRAPH Translation into requirements for fair online voting + +More recently, there has been an increasing interest in online voting systems that are secure and trustworthy. Such systems allow the user to cast their vote remotely, using a web-based system. This shift towards online voting introduces several additional requirements for information security. In the data security community, five fundamental requirements are widely recognized: data confidentiality, data integrity, availability, authenticity, and auditability, also known as non-repudiation or accountability. While these requirements are well-established, their application in the context of online voting may require their own interpretation. We will delve into these special cases in the following paragraphs.
Your text looks great! I think you've done a fantastic job of introducing electronic voting systems and then transitioning to the concept of online voting. Here are some minor suggestions to further improve your text:
+FIRST PARAGRAPH Introduction of Electronic Voting
+Electronic voting systems have been introduced over the years as an alternative to traditional paper ballots, allowing voters to cast their votes using machines or digital platforms. These systems have faced criticism for lacking verifiability properties, making it difficult to ensure that the voting process has not been tampered with. The concerns surrounding the integrity of electronic voting systems underscore the need for robust security measures.
+SECOND PARAGRAPH Translation into Requirements for Fair Online Voting
+The growing interest in online voting systems that are secure and trustworthy has led to a shift towards remote voting using web-based architectures. This transformation introduces several additional requirements for information security, which must be carefully considered to ensure the integrity of the voting process. In the data security community, five fundamental requirements are widely recognized: data confidentiality, data integrity, availability, authenticity, and auditability, also known as non-repudiation or accountability. While these requirements are well-established, their application in the context of online voting may require specialized interpretation.
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of introducing the topic and transitioning between paragraphs.
+% PARAGRAPH Authentication and authorization + +To start simple, authentication are authorization are pretty general: the system should be able to verify the identity of the user (authentication) and if that user is elegible to vote (authorization). Because of these requirements, the system should be design so that adversaries are unable to simulate a legitimate voter during registration. Voters should also be prohibited of casting their vote multiple times, as each voter should only count for 1 vote.
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+PARAGRAPH Authentication and Authorization
+Authentication and authorization are fundamental concepts in information security: the system must verify the identity of the user (authentication) and ensure that they are eligible to participate in the voting process (authorization). To meet these requirements, the system should be designed to prevent adversaries from simulating a legitimate voter during registration. Moreover, voters should not be able to cast their vote multiple times, as each vote should only count once.
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of introducing the topics of authentication and authorization!
+% PARAGRAPH Integrity AKA Verifiability, cast as indented property + +In the general context of information security, data integrity or verifiability means that the message has not been modified between transmitting and receiving the data. However, in the context of web-based voting, this property also includes the guarantee that the final tally is correct. That means that each voter should be able to verify that their vote was counted, that all votes were counted in the final tally, and that only real votes were counted. This is often called the cast-as-intented property.
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+PARAGRAPH Integrity (Verifiability)
+In the context of information security, data integrity or verifiability ensures that transmitted data remains unchanged and accurate from sender to receiver. In the specific case of web-based voting, this property extends beyond mere accuracy, ensuring that the final tally is correct and trustworthy. This means that each voter should be able to verify that their vote was accurately recorded, that all votes were correctly counted in the final tally, and that only valid votes were counted. This crucial property is often referred to as the "cast-as-intended" principle.
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- Emphasized the importance of integrity in web-based voting by using words like "accurate", "trustworthy", and "crucial". +
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of explaining the concept of integrity in the context of web-based voting!
+% PARAGRAPH Confidentiality AKA Vote secrecy and coercion resistance + +Voting systems should satisfy the confidentiality requirement. These systems might provide voter anonymity, in other words, the system never reveals what a voter voted for, both during submitting the vote and to the entity counting all the votes (when the voting period is over). However, in the context of remote voting, anonymity alone might be considered insufficient, as voting no longer happens in a secure and regulated environment, such as voting booths with official regulators nearby. Voters might be coerced into picking the choice of someone else. It is necessary to enable to voter to appear to comply with what is demanded of them by the coercer.
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+PARAGRAPH Confidentiality (Vote Secrecy and Coercion Resistance)
+Voting systems must satisfy the confidentiality requirement, ensuring that voters' choices remain private and secret throughout the entire voting process. This includes providing voter anonymity, meaning that the system never reveals how an individual voted, both during submission and after the voting period has concluded. However, in the context of remote voting, anonymity alone may be insufficient, as the lack of a secure and regulated environment can make voters vulnerable to coercion. In such cases, it is essential to enable voters to appear as though they are complying with demands from coercers while still maintaining the secrecy of their vote.
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- Added "throughout the entire voting process" to clarify that confidentiality is essential throughout the entire process, not just during submission or counting. +
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of explaining the concept of confidentiality in the context of remote voting!
+% PARAGRAPH Non-repudiation + +Non-repudiation generally means that the source of a piece of information cannot deny being the source of that information. This requirement is especially important in the context of voting, because the system should provide a way to trace back a cast vote to the original voter, otherwise votes might be generated, which breaks the requirement of being able to authenticate and authorize the voter.
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+PARAGRAPH Non-Repudiation
+Non-reputation generally refers to the inability of the source of information to deny its origin or ownership. In the context of voting, this requirement is crucial, as it ensures that each vote can be traced back to the original voter. Without non-repudiation, votes could potentially be generated fraudulently, violating the integrity of the voting process and undermining authentication and authorization mechanisms.
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of explaining the concept of non-repudiation in the context of voting!
+Final paragraph of this section. It should be clear that the requirement of availability should be considered independently of the fact that this is a voting system. Existing techniques can be used. +% PARAGRAPH Availability + +Finally, a voting system and the resulting tally should be highly available. However, our prototype will not consider this requirement, as this can be handled using existing techniques independently of the aspect that this is a voting system.
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+PARAGRAPH Availability
+In conclusion, ensuring the availability of a voting system and its resulting tally is crucial. This requirement should be considered independently of the fact that it is a voting system, as existing techniques can be leveraged to achieve high availability. Our focus will not be on developing novel solutions for this aspect, but rather on integrating established methods into our prototype.
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Your text is well-structured, and you've done a great job of summarizing the requirements for a voting system!
+This is what I came up with: +% PARAGRAPH Availability + +Finally, a reliable voting system must also prioritize availability. However, this requirement should be considered independently of the fact that this is a voting system, as existing techniques can be leveraged to achieve high availability. Our prototype will therefore not focus on this requirement.
Your rewritten paragraph looks great! You've maintained the clarity and coherence while making some subtle improvements. Here's a minor suggestion:
+PARAGRAPH Availability
+Finally, a reliable voting system must also prioritize availability, ensuring that voters can access and cast their votes without interruption. This requirement should be considered independently of the fact that this is a voting system, as existing techniques can be leveraged to achieve high availability. Our prototype will therefore not focus on developing novel solutions for this aspect.
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Your paragraph is already well-written, so this suggestion is just a minor tweak. Your text is clear, concise, and easy to follow. Good job!
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